七律 梦父 （ 平水韵 上平十三元）

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发布时间：2016-06-29 00:00

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七律  梦父

文/梦苑听雪

（上平十三元）


泣不成音泪湿衾，

骚人起榻似丢魂；
情思六月丢家眷，
梦醒三更念考恩；
依稀幼日牵亲手，
仿佛家中共饭温；
叹息连声神进壳，
空怨病疾夺翁尊。

  2016.6.28

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2016-07-07 00:00
谢谢冷月居士赏评！
2016-07-07 00:00
<div id="paperTitleArea" align="center" class="lp_title_type_3" style="margin:0px 0px 35px 72px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-family:punctuation, 微软雅黑, Tohoma;background-color:#FFFFFF;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;line-height:1.5;">七律&nbsp;&nbsp;梦父</span> </div> <div id="blogDetailDiv" style="margin:0px;padding:0px;font-family:punctuation, 微软雅黑, Tohoma;font-size:14px;background-color:#FFFFFF;"> <div class="blog_details_20120222" style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;text-align:center;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <p> <span style="font-size:24px;"><span style="font-weight:bold;">文/梦苑听雪<br /> </span><span style="font-size:16px;font-weight:bold;">（平水韵 &nbsp;上平十三元）<br /> </span></span> <p> <span style="font-size:24px;"><span style="font-size:16px;font-weight:bold;"><span>&nbsp;</span></span></span> </p> <p> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;color:#444444;">泣不成音泪湿衾，</span> </p> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 孩儿起榻似丢魂；</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 心思六月离亲眷，</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 梦醒三更念考恩；</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 曾忆童年携子手，</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp;依稀木桌共餐温；</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;text-align:start;"> <span style="color:#444444;font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; </span><span style="color:#444444;font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">可哀喜宴终要散</span><span style="color:#444444;font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">，</span> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> <span style="font-size:24px;font-weight:bold;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp;最悯祖母白发尊。</span> </div> </div> </div> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> </div> </div> </div> </div> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;"> <div style="margin:0px;padding:0px;color:#444444;font-size:20px;text-align:start;"> </div> <span style="font-size:24px;"><br /> （修改于2016.7.5）</span> </div> <div> <span style="font-size:24px;"><br /> </span> </div> </div> </p> </div> </div> </div> </div> </div>
2016-07-03 00:00
谢谢一归老师的鼓励！发的太匆忙了，还有很多问题，我会再修改的。
2016-06-30 00:00
对父亲的思念溢满纸上，但如父亲有知，看此诗当流泪感伤。如结句升华，则更慰先人。
2016-06-29 00:00
感情真挚，表达略无力