燕山亭 丝雨树下独酌

2019-12-22 00:00

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2019-12-22 00:00

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2016-08-15 00:00

云尔老师说得对，词填好后一定要养成自检的好习惯，这样就不会出现韵律最基本的错误了，感谢入住华夏文人榜，期待下次的精彩之作！

2016-08-14 00:00

<p> <span style="background-color:#FFFFFF;font-size:18px;color:#EE33EE;"><strong>宋徽宗 燕山亭：</strong></span> </p> <p> <span style="background-color:#FFFFFF;font-size:18px;color:#EE33EE;"><strong>裁剪冰绡，轻叠数重，淡著胭脂匀注。新样靓妆，艳溢香融，羞杀蕊珠宫女。易得凋零，更多少、无情风雨。愁苦。 问院落凄凉，几番春暮。</strong></span> </p> <p> <span style="background-color:#FFFFFF;font-size:18px;color:#EE33EE;"><strong>凭寄离恨重重，者双燕，何曾会人言语。天遥地远，万水千山，知他故宫何处。怎不思量，除梦里、有时曾去。无据,和梦也新来不做。</strong></span><span style="background-color:#FFFFFF;font-size:18px;color:#EE33EE;"><strong>&nbsp;</strong></span> </p> <p> <br /> <p class="MsoNormal" align="left"> <span style="font-size:12.0pt;font-family:宋体;">　　<b>燕山亭</b>　</span><span style="font-size:9.0pt;font-family:宋体;color:red;">双调九十九字，前段十一句五仄韵，后段十句五仄韵</span><span style="font-size:12.0pt;font-family:宋体;">　曾　觌</span><span style="font-size:12.0pt;font-family:Tahoma;"></span> </p> <p class="MsoNormal" align="left"> <span style="font-size:12.0pt;font-family:宋体;">河汉风清</span><span 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